Monday, February 23, 2009

Lede Practice

Can you rewrite this lede in less than 20 words and active voice?

  • Lede #1 Roger Datolli, 67, of 845 Conway Road, a retired attorney and husband of Mayor Sabrina Datolli, who is serving her fourth term as mayor, was injured in a three-vehicle accident Thursday afternoon around 3:20 p.m. in the afternoon at the intersection of Warren and Davidson avenues, suffering a broken leg and several broken ribs when the car he was driving was struck broadside by a pickup truck driven by Jerry R. Harris, 31, of 2245 Broadway Ave., and then was pushed into the path of another vehicle.

"Roger Datolli, husband of major Sabrina Datolli, was injured Thursday in an accident, suffering multiple injuries when three cars collided."

  • Lede #2
    Wondering whether or not it was legally possible and if they could muster enough votes to support their desire to see changes implemented in the downtown historic section of the city, city council members Sandra Gandolf and Alice Cycler at the regular monthly city council meeting raised the issue of having the city's planning and zoning commission look into the possibility of creating a local board to oversee changes to buildings within the six-block downtown historic district.

"City council's Sandra Gandolf and Alice Cycler voiced a desire for a board to oversee changes in historic district buildings."

In this lede, the attribution is emphasized. Rewrite it to emphasize the news instead, limiting the attribution to a few words at the end of the sentence. 30 words, active voice.

  • Lede #3
    At a news conference held at the Department of Energy in Washington, D.C., Monday afternoon, the head of the agency told reporters that the Senate's approval of a plan to store nuclear waste material in the Nevada desert near Las Vegas will provide a safe haven for more than 77,000 tons of radioactive waste.

The Senate's approval of a nuclear material storage plan will provide a safe haven for over 77,000 tons of radioactive waste near Las Vegas, the head of the Department of Energy said Monday.

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